Sunday, November 25, 2007

The Letter

I wish I could write a flagrant letter
put my feelings of this caper on paper
I think it could help me feel better
better than your paper mache bouquet
arms stretched out giving and blushing
blushing generosity weakens me wispy
I play an inspiring letter-writing lullaby
lullaby plays above sheets of papers bare
bare save sprays of perfume streaks misty
misty mood music moves my pen in the air
Air perfumed by Autumns open-window breeze
Breeze blows easing sweaty palms tight squeeze
squeeze slightly moves lightly and starts to compose
compose a letter to procure my need to feel better
better than this tear-stained paper mache rose
rose this morning needing to write this letter
to let her know that her barren attempts have failed
failed to lift my hearts disappointments and valid pain
painful beyond our past still so far I've no disdain
disdain wastes energy better well spent
spent on writing this letter never to be sent
instead A conceivable note of thanks alone is sullenly mailed
mailed as autumns intoxicating air is slowly deeply inhaled


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14 comments:

tumblewords said...

Nice style! It tells a story within a story...

Jo said...

Breathless energy!

Robin said...

I like the cadence, the way it flows.

Just Jen said...

I love how the letter flows. I don't think it was sullenly mailed....

daisies said...

wow!! this is fabulous!! xox

UL said...

Lucy that was beautifully written,

"I play an inspiring letter-writing lullaby
lullaby plays above sheets of papers bare
bare save sprays of perfume streaks misty
misty mood music moves my pen in the air
"
very lovely, thank you,

UL

kimberley said...

Lucy, this is so fabulous! really!

I've been down for a bit, but I'm feeling much better. So much better that I tagged you with a meme.

List an adjective that describes you for every letter of the alphabet BUT only POSITIVE adjectives are allowed :0)

Rebicmel said...

I so enjoy the way you moved the thought here! Such a lovely read to come to!

Lea said...

wonderful. I so enjoyed this letter...

Jane Poe (aka Deborah) said...

Great work L - such an emotional ride in this poem. xx, JP/deb

Lucy said...

wow, Are you all telling me the truth?? I have no confidence with Poetry... but these compliments are making me soar! Thanks so much for reading my poem. And Jen.. You're right! I really wasn't going for sullen, but I couldn't think of the correct adjective. Maybe you guys can help me.. :)

paris parfait said...

Lucy, the layers in your piece are wonderful!

Thinking aloud said...

came here from jen's and hey...i don't know how i missed this one!!! nice flow, nice poetry...!!!

spider said...

I'm so glad you brought this poem to my attention, Lucy! Somehow I missed it and that would have been a shame, indeed. It's beautiful. It flows elegantly. I can't help but wonder what was behind this poem...an incident, a dream, a feeling? No matter, it's a poem that many will be able to relate to in their own way.
Thank you for sharing it.
xoxoxo, Jenny