Saturday, May 30, 2009

covert dissolution


like a ghost you slip by- fly out rush rush
your thoughts covert- your feelings hush hush
never exposing what's locked in your guarded heart
incommunicative habit - I fear we're drifting apart

habitual apathy grows in place of mush-mush
As Frustrations you experience wane and crush crush
Be confident that it's secure to always trust me-Please stay smart
acknowledging my heartfelt concern?- such a courageous start!

sunday scribblings

11 comments:

anthonynorth said...

This is often a problem. Well exposed.

blisshappens said...

habits of apathy and lack of communication can be so destructive! hope all is well! -Meg

paisley said...

staying locked up inside yourself does have its down side...

forgetfulone said...

I sure know about lack of communication. That was very well-written!

ThomG said...

I like how you repeated certain words. That really worked for this.

Mothers in Arms

gautami tripathy said...

Well depicted..

SS: I dream in brown

Shari said...

I like the line "habitual apathy grows in place of mush-mush" If we are not careful it can start out as the smallest thing, and become, as you say, a habit.

Lucy said...

thanks everyone..
a little worried about one of my boys
but aren't i always worried about one or all of them?
your comments mean so much to me
xox

andy said...

Love the way the poem sounds, hush hush, mush mush etc.

Skittles said...

I guess apathy is one of the worse things around.

HUGS to you.

Tumblewords: said...

Lovely and heartfelt poem, Lucy! Mothers never stop worrying or being concerned about a child! Your poem brings it all home - nice work - good luck!