Saturday, May 30, 2009

covert dissolution

like a ghost you slip by- fly out rush rush
your thoughts covert- your feelings hush hush
never exposing what's locked in your guarded heart
incommunicative habit - I fear we're drifting apart

habitual apathy grows in place of mush-mush
As Frustrations you experience wane and crush crush
Be confident that it's secure to always trust me-Please stay smart
acknowledging my heartfelt concern?- such a courageous start!

sunday scribblings


anthonynorth said...

This is often a problem. Well exposed.

blisshappens said...

habits of apathy and lack of communication can be so destructive! hope all is well! -Meg

paisley said...

staying locked up inside yourself does have its down side...

forgetfulone said...

I sure know about lack of communication. That was very well-written!

ThomG said...

I like how you repeated certain words. That really worked for this.

Mothers in Arms

gautami tripathy said...

Well depicted..

SS: I dream in brown

Shari said...

I like the line "habitual apathy grows in place of mush-mush" If we are not careful it can start out as the smallest thing, and become, as you say, a habit.

Lucy said...

thanks everyone..
a little worried about one of my boys
but aren't i always worried about one or all of them?
your comments mean so much to me

andy said...

Love the way the poem sounds, hush hush, mush mush etc.

Skittles said...

I guess apathy is one of the worse things around.

HUGS to you.

Tumblewords: said...

Lovely and heartfelt poem, Lucy! Mothers never stop worrying or being concerned about a child! Your poem brings it all home - nice work - good luck!