19 hours ago
Saturday, May 30, 2009
covert dissolution
like a ghost you slip by- fly out rush rush
your thoughts covert- your feelings hush hush
never exposing what's locked in your guarded heart
incommunicative habit - I fear we're drifting apart
habitual apathy grows in place of mush-mush
As Frustrations you experience wane and crush crush
Be confident that it's secure to always trust me-Please stay smart
acknowledging my heartfelt concern?- such a courageous start!
sunday scribblings
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11 comments:
This is often a problem. Well exposed.
habits of apathy and lack of communication can be so destructive! hope all is well! -Meg
staying locked up inside yourself does have its down side...
I sure know about lack of communication. That was very well-written!
I like how you repeated certain words. That really worked for this.
Mothers in Arms
Well depicted..
SS: I dream in brown
I like the line "habitual apathy grows in place of mush-mush" If we are not careful it can start out as the smallest thing, and become, as you say, a habit.
thanks everyone..
a little worried about one of my boys
but aren't i always worried about one or all of them?
your comments mean so much to me
xox
Love the way the poem sounds, hush hush, mush mush etc.
I guess apathy is one of the worse things around.
HUGS to you.
Lovely and heartfelt poem, Lucy! Mothers never stop worrying or being concerned about a child! Your poem brings it all home - nice work - good luck!
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