Wednesday, January 28, 2009

Three Word Wednesday & 55flash fiction fri.

caress
jagged
ruthless

It began with his smooth smile; my hand received his gentle caress of affection
His piercing euphoric injection ( a ruthless diversion) gave courage to my frailty
I became lost in a pleasurable escape of a vertiginous alien dimension...

A jagged decayed tooth, the taste of my blood, his obscene bill... brought me back to reality



Did i have u going there for a second?
Of course I was talking about the dentist!

This is my first time contributing to...
flash 55

three word wednesday

20 comments:

Penny said...

haha that made me laugh. yes you had me going! I like the ruthless diversion hehe

Tumblewords: said...

Laughing...yes, you had me going. I was so sure I was going to have to close my eyes while you... oh, well! Good write!

floreta said...

very funny! i didn't see it coming.

myrtle beached whale said...
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myrtle beached whale said...

One of your best. Drew us all in. I love a story with a twist. You should post it as a 55 as well.

Queen-Size funny bone said...

yeah yeah you sex maniac we know what you were doing.

ThomG said...

I truly like stories with a twist. Nicely done.

anthonynorth said...

Nicely done, even though I hate dentists ;-)

paisley said...

dentist!!! no way.. it never even crossed my mind... and my dentists shots are far from euphoria... i hate Novocain!!!!!

Fledgling Poet said...

LOL...talk about a wake-up call! You really had me fooled. *shudders at the thought of going to the dentist*

Very cleverly done! :~)

angie said...

Haha!
Very cute!
And I lobe your blog!

Linda Jacobs said...

You are so clever! This is priceless! Will you show it to your dentist?

pjd said...

Echo Penny's opening comment. Ha ha!

forgetfulone said...

Excellent! It too me a minute. You almost had me!

Mona said...

LOL! My mind for going in the gutter for a while! :D

The dentist can sure make you aware of 'painful' reality in every sense of the term!

g-man said...

Lucy...GREAT JOB!!!
I hope you had fun doing this because thats the idea.
Thanks for visiting and commenting on my post. Have a Wonderful Week-End...Galen

Akelamalu said...

LOL you certainly had me going! That would have been a great 55 but you incorporated 3 word wednesday as well! Good stuff and welcome to 55 Flash Fiction. :)

My 55 is up too.

Tammy said...

I hate going to the dentist! You had me going Lucy. Well done! XXOO

Lulda Casadaga said...

too funny...I was gettin all excited...then damn those sound of drills filled the air. Great 1st 55! come by and visit me. :)

Mojo said...

Yeah, that was getting steamy there... or so I thought.

Are you related to Akelamalu? this is her favorite trick too!

Sensational debut, I hope you'll come back regularly!